Ipsum Bellus Crinitus

[IntentEldiablo]

 

Name: Ipsum Bellus Crinitus

Age: 25

Gender: Male

Race: Vulpkanin

Blood Type: AB-

General Occupational Role(s): Security Officer, Security Pod Pilot, Warden, Detective, Head of Security

 

Biography:

Ipsum Bellus Crinitus is a very warm and kind-hearted Vulpkanin. His home was with his family in Scotland, His family gave Ipsum his name which when translated is Latin for Is very Fluffy. His mother is a woman called Alice Dunbar, his father Hamish Dunbar, and his sister Heather Dunbar. The family was very wealthy and a pillar in the local community and host to many banquets and ball's. Ipsum loved his family dearly and they treated him with such love and kindness.

 

This all changed however when Ipsum grew a little older, he started to learn to walk on two legs and started to speak in the human language, This was not good for the family, for they had only ever seen Ipsum as a pet for there daughter. Ipsum was then forced to walk on all four paws and to never speak the human language. The family saw this as an opportunity to bolster there renown.

 

Ipsum was then cuffed and taken to fancy gatherings while the Dunbar's Paraded Ipsum around, showing off there exotic pet to all that would come and look at him. Ipsum had to be trained to behave and act like a dog, if he performed badly, the family would starve him, beat him and tighten the collar, he had many a night and day he never got food or water. Ipsum had no knowledge of the outside world, he had never met anyone of his kind, or any other species other than humans. He had no friends, no-one to interact with, Even the Girl Heather whom Ipsum saw as a sister disassociated herself with him, and took part in the beating and choking.

 

Ipsum was now 10 years old and still had the chain and collar on, almost never being taken off, when he was taken to a special government event, where the Dunbars wished to make waves with some high powered politicians. A man, in a fancy suit and an orange Scarf approached Ipsum. As per his training he assumed his position, sit, paw out, tongue out and look happy and smart. The man introduced himself to the family As a General for the NanoTransen Military division. The general Bent down and stroked the back of Ipsum's head and whispered into his hear "I know what you are, do not worry, i will help you" and with this the General disappeared.

 

The next morning Ipsum was still chained up to the wall, his owners had given him a box and some straw to sit and sleep on, scraps of bad food and some dirty water, This made Ipsum happy since it was clear he did well the night before and was being given a treat with the food. He then heard a bang on the door, suddenly the house was full of military personal, Ipsum watched as his owners were taken away one by one, Hamish screaming foul and awful words to the military personal, Alice trying to bargain and bribe them with influence, And Heather just looked at Ipsum in a sad way as she left the door. Ipsum was confused and scared, until a man appeared at the door frame with a blue suit with lots of shiny badges on them. The general from the night before

 

The general had freed Ipsum and asked him to stand and talk to him for a moment, Try as he might Ipsum was unable to stand properly, wobbling and crashing to the floor in pain, he had only ever walked for a few days when he was a pup before he was forced to walk on all four paws, so his legs were unable to cope with his weight. Ipsum was still able to talk, albeit poorly and rough. The general took Ipsum to the NanoTransen Military academy and got him a home, mentors and clean food and water. Ipsum had never seen such kindness before.

 

Ipsum spent many years in the academy, training his skills in weapon handling and in close combat both armed and unarmed, He learned how to walk properly again even without the stumbling he did for the first few years. He was trained in acceptance and tolerance of other species and races, surprisingly Ipsum did not hate humanity in the slightest, however he despises racism from any race towards any other race, He learned of what befell his owners, they lost there wealth and investors, they were discredited in the community and were branded as racists that were chucked in prison.

 

Ipsum was taught by a the very first Vulpkanin he ever met, A lieutenant, how to talk in their ancient tongue and was taught more about his culture and his people. Despite all the training though Ipsum was never able to remove his funny speech patterns, still talking in the third person, Ipsum also never had a childhood and so he still has the attitude of a pup at times, he also gets more sensitive to pain than most, its a reminder of his harsh treatment. The general took it upon himself to look after Ipsum, he gave him the basic knowledge of the world that the Academy never taught, Ipsum learned about the world and space, and how there is more out there than he could possibly imagine, it was this that lead Ipsum to learn how to fly a space pod, he wished to explore the vast depths of what was out there.

 

Ipsum is now 23 years old and graduated from the academy as a fully capable soldier and security personal. Ipsum still carries the marks of his old life, The scars across his neck and the fur which will never grow back around the area the collars and chains were. On his graduation day the general approached Ipsum and presented him with the orange scarf he wore on the day they met one another. the scarf was to be a symbol that humanity is not as cruel as Ipsum probably thought it was, and to help him cover up the scars on his neck, to make him able to move past the dark times, The scarf was a shield so no-one would see the marks and laugh at him but also to hide it from himself so that he could look in the mirror and not be reminded of his horrible past.

Qualifications:

Ipsum is a fully qualified security officer as he completed the NanoTransen Military program.

 

Employment Records:

Ipsum has shown great aptitude towards the role of security, and is quite capable of performing any role or task that he has been set to do

 

Security Records:

Assault on crew member- An altercation between Ipsum and a member of crew happened off duty and was caused by heavy racism, Ipsum has apologized over the matter and showed no resistance or aggravation towards anyone besides that crew-member

 

Medical Records:

Ipsum has requested that he be cloned. Due to an incident where cloning was broken and could not replicate his body at the time, Ipsum was once put in the body of a Skrell, he has since requested this never happen again because quote "it felt squishy and cold and uncomfortable" .

He has also requested that upon cloning completion that he be given his orange scarf to cover the scars and fur loss on his neck, the cloning process does not seem to heal the wounds or marks around his neck which is part of an ongoing investigation.

 

Personnel Photo (Appearance text):

 

 

Commendations [only to be added by admin]:

 

 

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Other Notes:

 

[Basilisk132mm]

 

1. You need some latin lessons

 

 

 

2. Please don't use the scientific latin name of the species of your character to name your character. Nobody names their children "Homo Sapiens Sapiens"

 

3. When someone says you are "a trained soldier" at the age of 22 that means you are probably going to be assigned to the frontline of infantry.

 

4. Nanotrasen is a mega-corporation, they don't have armies, and therefore they don't have generals. Their private military forces are mostly composed by Elite squads led by captains, sergeants or officials.

 

5. Please keep in mind that Space Station 13 is a game not meant to let you live your fantasized characters. They will die, they will ridiculized and they will be laughed at, unless you earn your respect. And you have to earn that respect without abusing all the meta-knowledge the wikipedia has to offer (Example: knowing surgery, chemistry, bomb disabling, airlock hacking and torch juggling all at once) since that is cheap and might even get you banned. Good luck gaining that respect on a server with an average population of +100 players. And even then you might end face-down in a pile of their own bloody feces.

 

6. You also seem to both severaly underestimate, and then severly overestimate, and then again severly underestimate the conginitve learning ability of an ,allegedly, intelligent sentient being.

 

7. I could go on but I want to give others the chance too.

 

SENTENCE:

 

Edited July 30, 2016 by Guest

[FreeStylaLT]

 

SENTENCE:

Hey. That looks familiar.

 

[Basilisk132mm]

I drew inspiration from the glorious splendor of your avatar, of course.

[Spacemanspark]

 

EMPEROR'S HOLY SPEECH.

Where the hell did you go, I haven't seen you in months

 

[Basilisk132mm]

 

EMPEROR'S HOLY SPEECH.

Where the hell did you go, I haven't seen you in months

 

You mean I was relevant enough for you to remember me? I don't think i even played on the server more than 10 times or so. Either way, appreciated!

 

[Lorenzo_The_Marauder]

 

Scotland? As in Earth Scotland? I thought Earth was so heavily polluted to the point of being uninhabitable.

 

Seems... Snowflakey. But a realistic backstory can be hard to write, the character Ipsum is pretty good, just work on the backstory.

 

[SomeGuy9283]

 

Regardless of the contents, I think it would better fit the format if it was rewritten like a factual report. Keep in mind that character records are (ICly) strictly factual, third-person objective dossiers kept by professional HR personnel. For example: The military officer you described, related to NT or not, would have likely been mentioned by name in the record, whereas such details as the neck scarring and trouble walking upright would have been listed in the medical, rather than biographical, section. Additionally, I have to agree with the previous mention of the character in question being qualified as a 'soldier'. Station-side security is quite separate from CC troops, and the paramilitary NT Naval structure is leagues different from other in-game militaries.

 

Regardless of whether you decide to revise the main elements of the backstory, I would hope you would rework it as to sound more like an actual personnel file.

 

[SomeGuy9283]

[TyOmaha]

i love ipsum

[The Respected Man]

On 7/28/2016 at 2:41 PM, IntentEldiablo said:

the scarf was to be a symbol that humanity is not as cruel as Ipsum probably thought it was

You haven't seen anything yet vulp abomination

[SomeGuy9283]

40 minutes ago, The Respected Man said:

You haven't seen anything yet vulp abomination

Was wondering when you would pick up on this thread.

[MindLeaker]

>tfw you return to the forums briefly and see this

[Streaky Haddock]

Diablo's an alright guy and Ipsum makes a decent effort at being a good sec officer. Don't attack him just because you don't like his biography.

[Hylocereus]

LEAVE BRITNEY IPSUM ALONE

[imsxz]

Sorry but this crew record doesn't fit in with the high standards we hold for realism in space station 13. The realism aspects can be found in every corner of SS13, such as our advanced atmospherics system, in depth chemistry (featuring real life medicines including fartonium), bipedal lizards, and a megacorporation which hires both mentally challenged mutes who refuse to take mutadone and sit around at the bar all day, alongside security officers who are excellent in combat while also knowing advanced surgery methods.

As others have made abundantly clear, the realism in your character record is definitely lacking, and doesn't fit with the current ss13 realism standards.